For this weeks annotated bibliography update i had to use the themes I went searching on in last weeks blog task, the ones I highlighted which were 5 I think. I had to write up a paragraph for each theme I found. All my theme were correlating with each other which is a great thing like the theme needed each other to progress as one. (I do not know if that made sense to you but it made sense in my head 😅)
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Hi Tochi. I really enjoyed reading your bibliography. The themes within your topic are really varied and create a good contrast when reading through them all. I also liked the themes you picked, I found them very fitting. It was interesting to see what you had pulled from your papers and put into your paragraphs to then see what they became after. I think what you've written is really strong, it may just need a bit of tidying up. I'm not sure how we're supposed to talk in these paragraphs (professional, reflective etc) but you have a few anecdotes and opinions in there that might have to be changed or re-worded depending on what style we're supposed to go for. Otherwise, I really enjoyed reading. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteHi Tochi, it's Aoibhe. I just had a read through your paragraphs. Well Done ! Looks like you put a lot of work into them, was great to see the before & after too from when you pulled all of the information out of the papers to your new adapted paragraph. I feel I learned quite a lot about your theme. Only suggestion I would have is to make sure they all sound the same, in some paragraphs you quoted someone and said that "blank says" and in another paragraph you said that "blank states" Probably not a huge thing, just might be something to watch to make sure everything flows in the final piece. Otherwise really great work !! Aoibhe :) Good luck with it all.
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